Okay, let's see how closely you've followed my own comics writing/translation/dialoguing work of recent years...
If I were writing the following panel of SUPERMAN, what would I change?
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Monday, June 27, 2022
Questions You Never Asked: If I Were Writing Superman, What Would I Do Here?
Okay, let's see how closely you've followed my own comics writing/translation/dialoguing work of recent years...
If I were writing the following panel of SUPERMAN, what would I change?
Send your answers in the form of comments, please!
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If I had to guess (which I do), Ber-Tal would be Ber-Tram.
DING! DING! DING, Deb!
Large spotlights are crisscrossing the room! Whistles are blowing! And blinding amounts of confetti are dropping from the ceiling!
Yes, indeed… You KNOW that, if I was given that page to dialogue, the little Kandorian would absolutely be named “Ber-Tram”! (…Maybe I might *still* use it someday, if and when I get another story about aliens! It *would* be a shame to let it go to waste!)
One of the primary things that fuel this Blog these days would be the observations I make, and the fun-facts I stumble across, in the course of (all together now) “The Great Comics Organization and Storage Retirement Project”, and, in the course of that sometimes overwhelming but always joyful activity, that particular Superman panel happened to catch my ever-active eye – and the thought occurred to me that it would make a fun exercise in Blogging!
Of course, Superman himself (…or the letterer of his printed dialogue) helped out by having the name “Ber-Tal” in BOLD, where said “ever-active eye” (vs. the other “lazy one”) would be more likely to notice it!
Yes! Debbie Anne beat the rest of us to the punch, but I would have agreed that you would change Ber-Tal to Ber-Tram!
I would also like to venture that the rather stodgy exposition which is given an airing in this panel would also, at your hands, have undergone a transformation into something less stodgy and less pointedly expositional. You would have been able to convey the ideas in fewer words and without sounding quite as forced as it reads. That's my vote of confidence!
Scarecrow:
Yeah, I figured this would be a matter of “who saw it first”, rather than any difficulty in puzzling it out. So, let’s give Deb an “Early Bird Award” *** in addition to the “Bertie Award” *** that’s already on its way to her!
In its mainstream books, DC tended to use a more stilted dialogue until 1968 – perhaps to present more of an all-encompassing type of exposition. It’s a house-style you get used to. But, thanks for the vote of confidence!
*** “Early Bird Awards” and “Bertie Awards” have no monetary, intrinsic, trade, scientific, or sentimental value and exhibit no physical form whatsoever. Void where prohibited by law, and also void where it is not. This fine print would be much smaller and more unreadable, if Google Blogger comments would allow for smaller fonts.
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